Saturday, July 16, 2011

How is my writing now?

I agree with Alice,you didn't really state that he was in a car in the first place. And it seems like you just dragged the paragraph on from a different one? But other than that,that sounds pretty nice! If you've seen my question floating around here..you'll know I'm not a good writer...so...but I think that's pretty nice!

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